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關於我穿越/重生到修仙世界的那件事 第一季補充點評

碳基萌化物（盟主） 碳基萌化物（盟主）
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關於我穿越/重生到修仙世界的那件事

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【首席作品】《幻仙遊記》

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總評：

結構完整、節奏出色，敘事轉場順暢，能獨立閱讀又承接語場，技巧與情感並進。

善於以「角色困境」帶動世界觀進入，兼顧行動與情緒層次。

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語錄總結：

「你以為是穿越，其實是誤會的延長；你以為是誤會，卻是真正冒險的開始。」

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【並列第二】《藍澈篇》、《景儀篇》

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《藍澈篇》

總評：

情感描寫最為細膩，角色心理與環境氛圍融合自然。

缺點為排版與書寫技術瑕疵削弱閱讀體驗。

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語錄總結：

「在不能修煉的谷底，他反而修煉出了人與人之間最難提煉的共鳴。」

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《景儀篇》

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總評：

起承轉合完整，情節設計具「輕小說節奏」，笑點自然，角色塑造鮮明。

長處在於角色內心的自我懷疑與轉化過程。

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語錄總結：

「修煉的路不一定通往巔峰，有時只是繞進自己都意想不到的那條感情支線。」

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【佳作三位】

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《教書先生篇》

總評：

文筆細緻，過去片段鋪排動人，但篇幅大部分未觸及當期世界觀，屬敘事外延之作。

感性強，視角成熟，然「參賽任務完成度」略低。

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語錄總結：

「有些人從戰場來，卻最終選擇在課堂上告訴孩子們，什麼叫無傷。」

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《焰焰篇》

總評：

情緒層次豐富，角色形象一致性高，但大部分為聊天室內容照搬，原創性偏弱。

與世界觀聯動明確，但缺少背景設定（花妖）呼應。

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語錄總結：

「她忘了自己是花妖，卻在每一場互動裡重新開花，像是玩家，也像是被呵護的角色。」

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《夜煥篇》

總評：

節奏流暢，笑點穩定，群體共感強烈。

幾乎全程為遊戲活動紀錄與原始互動內容改寫，創作含量偏低，具娛樂性但缺獨立敘事。

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語錄總結：

「他永遠不知道自己為什麼會在那裡，但他總是第一個走進去的人。」

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【未上榜者簡評】（非公示用）

未能通過初審之作品多為以下類型：

完全未參照題意與世界觀，寫入其他背景。

僅完成1~2句話，未成篇。102Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGpHVucwxqY

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