Okay, I have a feeling there are some problems with the story. But I need to any readers to point them out. Not the writing itself but the storyline.
--Before I head into a direction that will make you stop reading.
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--I'm debating to rewrite to make things right XD, but not even I can catch everything.
Anyone has any suggestions? Any problems with Mind Control 9.701Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡeLTwxPy7Fo
Before I move onto episode 10, I'd like to keep on a decent path.
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