【評文活動】嵐斕子在評文——第一期（試辦） - 作品名：平行世界的管理者突然當起了腐女！？

類別：平行世界、BL、腐女

希望評價章節：第一章~第七章

希望評判風格：越細緻越好，挑剔風

希望評論的點：標點符號的部分已有人評，希望能聚焦於故事內容

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平行宇宙

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對於這個世界是未知的存在

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其神秘感，橫跨整個夜空

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深不見底的宇宙

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猶如傳說一般，想要探索，卻求而不得

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於這個世界以外的世界

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與地球一樣的另個地球

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到底是什麼樣的

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平行宇宙是否真的存在？

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你以為是這樣嗎？

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才怪~~

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這哪是什麼這麼神聖的設定啊

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每天都要到不同地球執行不同世界的實驗

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不只要當月老，還要當預祝考試成功的神，每個人的命運都要隨時調整，誰當有錢人小孩，誰家是窮人都要安排的仔仔細細，甚至連死亡都要親自操弄，還要空出時間去到星辰殿開會

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每天都要小心翼翼不要把地球給毀了，好幾次都是直接爆炸重來

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累死我了

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嗚嗚每天都在重複，有夠無聊的，有沒有可以看的？我受不了了

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欸？這個是，兩個男生怎麼那麼曖昧？欸~~（笑）

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好像找到好東西可以消磨時間了！顆顆顆（邪笑）

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好好嗑...（流口水）

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怎麼那麼好嗑，可是他們怎麼都還沒走到一起？

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現在就要發揮作為平行世界管理者的作用了（流口水）

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助理！！我要湊合他們！！

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助理：什麼！？你是白癡嗎？如果被上面發現的話，你我都會很慘的！

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不要說出去就好啦！

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助理：就算這樣長官也會定期來看啊！

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哎呀那個藏起來就好了，顆顆

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不.要.說.出.去.ㄤ（封口令）

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助理：嗚嗚嗚，怎麼這樣~~你做事總是這麼我行我素，誰快來救救我！！

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人類，今天起，你就是我的眼

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洪苒苒：啊？？

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伊嘻嘻嘻，把我嗑慘了

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究竟，她要如何一邊繞過平行管理長官的法眼，一邊嗑瓜呢？又會做出什麼行為湊合同性戀者呢？盡情期待

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補充：此作品較特別，為BL但主視角非BL，歡迎跟著平管一起來嗑瓜😏

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作品名：平行世界的管理者突然當起了腐女！？

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