作者妳好816Please respect copyright.PENANAX3RWB1EMNa
受到妳的邀请816Please respect copyright.PENANALW4VehLKdH
稍微看了下这本佩姬816Please respect copyright.PENANAX6GRGL8Dog
确实有意思
说说自己对这小说的看法816Please respect copyright.PENANAzbDKJtv19X
你写了关于主角前世一堆东西816Please respect copyright.PENANAbg2eYpCewt
现世一堆东西816Please respect copyright.PENANAb4QWK5UuPH
其实就很简单一个道理816Please respect copyright.PENANA74QlIWa5G1
主角想要被爱816Please respect copyright.PENANAnNJ6jXk53i
佩姬採取行动的理由都是被爱816Please respect copyright.PENANAat0J2JPVtc
男主卢克爱816Please respect copyright.PENANAYi8DTInOMS
主角就爱回去816Please respect copyright.PENANAzTX0AxCsR4
女主伊莎爱816Please respect copyright.PENANArKziAti56o
主角就爱回去816Please respect copyright.PENANAinZijgILvi
主角对她爸妈也是一样的道理816Please respect copyright.PENANAYVKMRC3sY7
想要被爱是佩姬的主题816Please respect copyright.PENANAPJgJXVey1V
主角性别不是问题816Please respect copyright.PENANA8sDkvZLlch
内心冲突不是问题816Please respect copyright.PENANAg3Py70b8AD
主角被爱就迎刃而解816Please respect copyright.PENANAGrqBTkioNJ
看不懂这点整部书就看不了816Please respect copyright.PENANAvQhsKvXLFQ
妳的书乏人问津是这道理816Please respect copyright.PENANAcZeLJ9z39D
作者妳说主角口是心非816Please respect copyright.PENANAYUSoIZ9E8p
欸我说这不对816Please respect copyright.PENANALn13Mc6I56
这明摆着口非心也非816Please respect copyright.PENANAMpiuyoYh5M
瞧瞧那配角艾德兰816Please respect copyright.PENANAn9j22xesHf
主角说不喜欢他还给整个欲擒故纵816Please respect copyright.PENANAci7jDVmWqF
给他瞧瞧内裤还奢望他拿来当配菜816Please respect copyright.PENANAtdUSb6LVUP
如果不是渴望被爱的人不做这种事的816Please respect copyright.PENANAvIYaDR5ITd
为了被爱816Please respect copyright.PENANAngYQVOIsV0
连原本的性别都不要了816Please respect copyright.PENANAoW0pSOEZFl
这主角疯的傻的816Please respect copyright.PENANAgoj8A0DBz4
可瞧她是个妹子所以没啥问题
说说其它角色816Please respect copyright.PENANAgja6mXXVuu
女主伊莎816Please respect copyright.PENANAW1K2wvIrTi
单纯的色鬼816Please respect copyright.PENANAlRlRSyRaAS
作者您没讲 可我猜应有病娇属性816Please respect copyright.PENANAVn216GEbYu
黑化可能
艾德兰816Please respect copyright.PENANAPIy1404fez
可怜虫阿816Please respect copyright.PENANAMePwCrEHbN
这角色最可怜的就是想当好人可当不了816Please respect copyright.PENANAnwySshsiLE
妳说解释不够816Please respect copyright.PENANAJF0tjcbNzt
我到觉得清楚816Please respect copyright.PENANAoLQNRJEszc
这种事常见的阿
男主卢克才是那个写得不够816Please respect copyright.PENANAggQlWFpfKJ
他为啥强816Please respect copyright.PENANAqubEYwH8Il
妳啥都没讲816Please respect copyright.PENANAcu6bxBiuMS
这才是问题
主角老妈是佩姬这故事最好明白816Please respect copyright.PENANAOqc7MYGiGE
也是除主角外最明白的角色816Please respect copyright.PENANAg6N7CuIGh4
她就拿来爱主角的816Please respect copyright.PENANAayZHb6Bzmx
功能性角色
还有其他许多816Please respect copyright.PENANADlCWBBKysO
我就不提了
妳在作品裡回收的台词很多816Please respect copyright.PENANASMgPWOX2Ga
可以瞧见妳的苦心816Please respect copyright.PENANA7EC2Lwowd0
我觉得这没必要816Please respect copyright.PENANABJLjlmRxra
好的台词提一次够了816Please respect copyright.PENANAIIvq20vzxy
重提令人厌烦
妳说别的评文说设定不严谨816Please respect copyright.PENANAdmUtkCVe7L
我倒嫌设定囉嗦816Please respect copyright.PENANA8sfWYXh0aL
空白很重要816Please respect copyright.PENANAA3VvH64CfX
没明白有没明白的好处816Please respect copyright.PENANASHssFbPi0h
而且妳作品裡的问题都自洽其说816Please respect copyright.PENANAyZKHouFmcC
这就够了
谢谢作者妳邀我看这书816Please respect copyright.PENANAMNPLRbvEsB
我还会继续看的816Please respect copyright.PENANANyVHJvXzWK
确实好看816Please respect copyright.PENANAbgzsRLVx4a
希望你这能写完816Please respect copyright.PENANA6msH9uBPJk
能放上起点不816Please respect copyright.PENANAFt2hB5FC6h
这样我也好跟亲友推荐
816Please respect copyright.PENANA0gSgkPtgMV
作者回應:816Please respect copyright.PENANA3atf7c2Mtw
感謝評文者看到了隱藏在故事中的細節,816Please respect copyright.PENANAbKoD59IBlt
有些段落在經您提點之後才發現是這麼一回事,816Please respect copyright.PENANAxeQVlNXGAe
潛藏在文章中的祈願被人挖出來有稍稍一點害羞816Please respect copyright.PENANAajo50QBBpe
感謝你的評文816Please respect copyright.PENANAqs3MIKY52F
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