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作品連結:《變態大學 University of Perversion》8964 copyright protection180PENANA0nHcsAASSn 維尼
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大家好,連續幾天在變態大學接觸各式各樣的變態後,我終於成功脫逃,並將爲Happy喵的《變態大學 University of Perversion》寫下心得。8964 copyright protection180PENANAQLhTR9ZrM0 維尼
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首先,依然不厭其煩地先説明我對於心得的想法。8964 copyright protection180PENANAKgVwAifeLB 維尼
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在這個寫得好並不代表一定有人氣的嚴苛環境下,我希望心得不只是單純挖掘作者可進步之處,還希望作者能夠獲得動力完成作品,甚至……8964 copyright protection180PENANAYTZ5Mp1woz 維尼
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……能夠讓心得替這部作品召來更多讀者。8964 copyright protection180PENANAS6BfQHlEE0 維尼
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有鑒於此,本心得將會分爲兩個部分:8964 copyright protection180PENANAPvzpNrVxbN 維尼
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2)面向作者的分享式心得8964 copyright protection180PENANAwuYTE6YuRG 維尼
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好巧不巧的,抽完籤當夜,這部作品被分配給我後,就看見Happy喵在PENANA官方Discord説了以下兩句話:8964 copyright protection180PENANAbv7GogTZyN 維尼
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「我要榨乾黑正的幣幣」和「我唔鍾意蟲蟲」。8964 copyright protection180PENANAZsOH9LYXd2 維尼
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很好。8964 copyright protection180PENANA6kEYCaUTRY 維尼
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我馬上決定以非常嚴謹的眼光,並以充滿個人風格的方式來寫下心得,甚至為此潛入了變態大學。8964 copyright protection180PENANAgLuNEcjW8O 維尼
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事不宜遲,現在開始。8964 copyright protection180PENANA0H2kfhivyV 維尼
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1)寫給讀者的宣傳式心得8964 copyright protection180PENANAI0rLfUgU8c 維尼
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首先,《變態大學 University of Perversion》是個怎樣的故事呢?8964 copyright protection180PENANAVMhIL0WbNo 維尼
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根據我潛入之後的觀察,這是一個關於男主角進入學校,立志成爲變態,並結識一大堆變態角色的變態故事。8964 copyright protection180PENANAEbunlalQU2 維尼
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換句話説,感覺就像變態版的《哈利波特》。8964 copyright protection180PENANAW0gRfgSqmX 維尼
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如果喜歡這種校園故事,又可以接受各種變態角色及變態劇情,那麽可以嘗試進入這所學校就讀。8964 copyright protection180PENANA9vgcHHF5Hz 維尼
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不過在入學之前,請問你們認識Lv99史萊姆、凝雨、卯金加刀子、笑具、柚月、願飄零、虛冲等作者嗎?8964 copyright protection180PENANAtUzfBuee1p 維尼
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認識?8964 copyright protection180PENANA2tIQpg3wII 維尼
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很好!那你就放心入學,跟一堆變態角色們度過變態的校園生活,並滿足對變態的渴望。8964 copyright protection180PENANA2sxvlmyip5 維尼
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不認識?8964 copyright protection180PENANAXnJykBrhuk 維尼
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那就……不如先去看看那些作者的作品?8964 copyright protection180PENANAVaGzaSffmF 維尼
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這是因為……Happy喵讓這些作者出現在學校裏,並惡搞他們。8964 copyright protection180PENANACTn6wy8lHl 維尼
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要是不熟悉這些作者,入學後就會覺得角色名字很奇怪,或是有些梗搞不明,甚至……會有些疏離感。8964 copyright protection180PENANAV3sUYu9i3c 維尼
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換句話說,這部作品的閲讀門檻挺高的。8964 copyright protection180PENANAdYEBT8tiMf 維尼
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能不能得到樂趣,最終視乎讀者們有多瞭解出現在作品裏的衆多作者。8964 copyright protection180PENANAGfWkIBlVfc 維尼
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在此,預祝各位入學順利,成功當上變態。8964 copyright protection180PENANA2q1Py0gJTp 維尼
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《變態大學 University of Perversion》作品連結:https://www.penana.com/article/10347668964 copyright protection180PENANABuTZLJtffr 維尼
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以上就是《寫給讀者的宣傳式心得》。8964 copyright protection180PENANAE2cKtc6iUo 維尼
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2)面向作者的分享式心得8964 copyright protection180PENANAZBIq4a3SZD 維尼
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説實話,我覺得這部作品有兩大優點,分別是「有趣的角色們」及「獨樹一格的變態題材」。8964 copyright protection180PENANAai0CjMh7AO 維尼
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而問題也很明顯,就是上面説過的閲讀門檻偏高,畢竟有些作者我也不認識,有時會感覺……這部作品不是寫給我看的。8964 copyright protection180PENANAZCzgoxUofy 維尼
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要如何解決這問題?8964 copyright protection180PENANAHBSHUkPRRr 維尼
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方法是有的,我相信作者本人也清楚知道,但卻選擇不那麽做而已。8964 copyright protection180PENANA7YnK2FVNEI 維尼
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不過看在有些人還是會好奇如何解決閲讀門檻的問題,我就寫出來好了,順便充字數。8964 copyright protection180PENANANXNLvidFfc 維尼
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第一個問題,角色名都用作者的名字,例如主角名為Lv99史萊姆,會讓人覺得非常突兀。8964 copyright protection180PENANAOnBt4dlDRE 維尼
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如何解決?8964 copyright protection180PENANAmG6hel34oU 維尼
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拿回主角Lv99史萊姆作為案例,我會建議寫成正經風格的「雷貝爾.乃帝奈.史萊穆」或是亂來瘋格的「勒貝爾.奶滴奶.屎來母」。8964 copyright protection180PENANAOYxoo0e1mv 維尼
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如此一來,應該能減少各種作者名字出現時的突兀感,降低閲讀門檻,方便一般讀者的同時,也能讓名字出現在作品裏的作者們開心。8964 copyright protection180PENANAgMBP0xMqyF 維尼
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其實我相信Happy喵也知道這一點,只是選擇不那麽做。8964 copyright protection180PENANAaSWKsdL22Z 維尼
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第二個問題,就是變態題材挺特別的,但劇情結構感覺有點鬆散。8964 copyright protection180PENANAXUvkTmh4fB 維尼
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如何解決?8964 copyright protection180PENANAVjIDfO3PG3 維尼
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這個就更簡單了,認真思考一下劇情。8964 copyright protection180PENANAH8FhL9WpJI 維尼
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同樣的,我相信Happy喵也知道這一點,只是選擇不那麽做。8964 copyright protection180PENANA7skMogIvre 維尼
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最後,在這裏挑幾個小毛病説説,讓大家一起探討好了。8964 copyright protection180PENANAPSzVPKN1h6 維尼
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首先:8964 copyright protection180PENANAYOCncC11IE 維尼
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作品是第一人稱,個人覺得不用特地强調「我的老媽」或「我的老爸」,直接老媽老爸就好,少點贅字。8964 copyright protection180PENANA2Xg9hwq101 維尼
其他章節也有些贅字,但就不一一細說。建議修文時,多想想某些字會不會感覺累贅了點。8964 copyright protection180PENANAHEQz8bRGiZ 維尼
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另一個毛病,就是當同一個場面出現三或更多角色時,我有時會分不出對白是誰説的。8964 copyright protection180PENANAwpbHILoCsW 維尼
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一開始發現這個問題,就是第十章的列車那裡。8964 copyright protection180PENANAcMUhecGRKT 維尼
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這一點還請多加注意。8964 copyright protection180PENANAcDMTa1pAtk 維尼
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個人對於這部作品感到最遺憾的,就是處處令我覺得「這部作品似乎只寫給特定人群,不是寫給我的」。8964 copyright protection180PENANAVNByqgGbeB 維尼
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我上次寫了《大小姐今天也在煩惱戀愛的事情!》的心得後,其實還有繼續閲讀完畢並補上後續劇情的心得,但似乎很多人不知道。8964 copyright protection180PENANACWs54QV2YM 維尼
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在這裡向Happy喵說聲抱歉,這部作品我不會再繼續看下去了,理由就是上面寫的:「這部作品似乎只寫給特定人群,不是寫給我的」。8964 copyright protection180PENANA84zQ6AcliF 維尼
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很可惜,我只是接觸了Happy喵愛玩鬧及變態的一面,卻無法從這部作品觸及作者的靈魂。所以,我跑去加了《我們曾經在這個世界上竭盡全力地生存下去!》的書籤,希望能探索作者變態之外的另一面。8964 copyright protection180PENANAAbj4Pi85Wo 維尼
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這裏就送佛送到西,放下《我們曾經在這個世界上竭盡全力地生存下去!》的連結好了:https://www.penana.com/article/9273198964 copyright protection180PENANA1qBz7Ika4d 維尼
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想説的就是這些,願Happy喵創作愉快!8964 copyright protection180PENANAhVZ7nJcQuJ 維尼
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