終完修正完第一章。改動的地方如下:
角色改名724Please respect copyright.PENANAXnBN6Oid49
除了玄牛之外,所有畜牲集團的戰士都重新命名,因為那些陳生、李生、等等的命名,亂來之餘,又不符合作品性格。所以有以下改動:
何大力->南昌一絕724Please respect copyright.PENANAeYIjOMaP3d
劉元山->海柏724Please respect copyright.PENANAfcREZuS86q
陳生->曉尚724Please respect copyright.PENANAhSHBB1wAEa
李生->曉珀724Please respect copyright.PENANANblm5ObMe7
嚴生->迎豐724Please respect copyright.PENANA4WY2EIJdhq
史生->富薈724Please respect copyright.PENANAz7wybB1v3b
林生->傲形724Please respect copyright.PENANAVSXVMymsXt
黃生->利奧724Please respect copyright.PENANAHTJLfiGjhQ
張生->曉岸
執文法724Please respect copyright.PENANApZlwXDnZRs
也許是小弟進步了,現在回看第一章,文法竟是那麼糟糕,是以也大幅修正。724Please respect copyright.PENANAd0tzhYxm7B