可惜文中太多「我」了,如果可以換寫法會更好。最後一句的處理比較好,不然就只是普通的夢境。對於怪物沒有比較深入描繪,所以感覺不恐怖。繼續加油吧,希望潛水中~生活順利。54Please respect copyright.PENANAzQgNimLcyq
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以怪物為主題:54Please respect copyright.PENANAsTtBocmtDU
創挑還沒有結果啊!54Please respect copyright.PENANA1GuCi9A4zu
有了嗎?54Please respect copyright.PENANAZYKdk3AtL4
還沒啊……54Please respect copyright.PENANAS1yjW4rzSj
怎麼還沒呢?54Please respect copyright.PENANAGWgQKUBuKw
怎麼呢……54Please respect copyright.PENANAxvEZs3rMWz
拖延就是一只看不見卻處處有的怪獸,54Please respect copyright.PENANAyfBITk51b1
我們的生命,越拖越短,越拖越乏。54Please respect copyright.PENANAZdRic9BRKF
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我想在其他平台發,我嘗試不要用創挑。54Please respect copyright.PENANAWt2IOj4UPE
今天會把報告交上來吧?54Please respect copyright.PENANAbJ60oi9Kcn
我聽說下個星期才是截止日期~54Please respect copyright.PENANAjOazpvo2si
啊!有怪獸!54Please respect copyright.PENANAiJM5AbePXK
哪裡?那裡?54Please respect copyright.PENANApWynwabiyO
這裡有,這裡有,那裡也有~54Please respect copyright.PENANAHreZkErxdN
就在你你我的時間裡!54Please respect copyright.PENANAYn5hEw7hzA
生命,越拖越短,越拖越乏。54Please respect copyright.PENANAYkEkRjUeRO
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〈被怪物襲擊〉潛水中~54Please respect copyright.PENANAXvNLGI50jl
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