
作品:【魚魚創挑第六期】那年盛夏,曾經的約定
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類型:小說
作者:嚮往國度
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▌文筆能力
劇情完整,文具流暢。364Please respect copyright.PENANAxYyWNwg0h0
讀後,後勁十足,如酒釀思緒般。
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透過第一人稱與第二人稱的視野,交互傳達了兩份不同的心思。364Please respect copyright.PENANASBQKlPj7YY
夏日伏筆,是男孩明媚的憂傷。364Please respect copyright.PENANA2yvpFnHc2X
如是再臨故地,卻已然不再是重前的男孩。364Please respect copyright.PENANAm7Yt3VmKKG
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藉由未來的不確定是,也流露出了男生對於自己的約定,逐漸地薄弱。364Please respect copyright.PENANA8IE1Cw0H4l
這是現實面,對於作者,或是對於讀者都是不願意去面對的那一塊。364Please respect copyright.PENANAeHnSMR9E7v
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另外貼近了生活書籍的書名,巧妙地輕描出彼此間不一般的情感;假使不是這麼熟悉彼此,又豈能知道對方的喜好呢?364Please respect copyright.PENANAUUpJ2aLUCl
而在被書打到頭、跌倒撞得滿頭包等細微處,讓人察覺出這一切都是為了女孩的自白中,顯露出其中的焦急與脾氣,儘管如此,皆能顯露出對他的依戀。
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▌結語心得
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。364Please respect copyright.PENANANqtUCYmo02
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。364Please respect copyright.PENANA3m2db9pcqh
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。364Please respect copyright.PENANApFKSoFnWA0
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。364Please respect copyright.PENANA3WBpDpa1ki
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?364Please respect copyright.PENANAuvb2jjiXNw
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀胸情節呢?364Please respect copyright.PENANA3BzzdDqwjU
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。364Please respect copyright.PENANAjtPpJB9TkD
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。364Please respect copyright.PENANA487ZvHWbMb
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。364Please respect copyright.PENANALHL19xD8SG
只是他仍未發現而已。364Please respect copyright.PENANAXbEen6ebLn
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「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。364Please respect copyright.PENANA9PBUYHIKuW
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?364Please respect copyright.PENANAx5DbDrnkzk
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。364Please respect copyright.PENANAUCAxNZSpEO
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我,還會再來嗎?364Please respect copyright.PENANA4hMgXTUT6N
每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?364Please respect copyright.PENANA6yyBEevi1S
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。364Please respect copyright.PENANAgPoUYreyHH
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」364Please respect copyright.PENANAwQc5xL2TJ1
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。364Please respect copyright.PENANAH4uR6o3HpI
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但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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