首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAQObQpBvRGQ
身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAeYCVdkfH6W
以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
579Please respect copyright.PENANA1IcXb6ZMsn
由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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579Please respect copyright.PENANAwkQyvOb8o7
小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。579Please respect copyright.PENANAtMssfos2AY
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---579Please respect copyright.PENANAKt3ffAVDHe
579Please respect copyright.PENANAE4N0lyYukU
又一刻,轉折接踵而來。579Please respect copyright.PENANAaevGp1WJ2T
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。579Please respect copyright.PENANAfV7SNdOEPu
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。579Please respect copyright.PENANAhaplO7B04J
而這篇在下章就是如此。579Please respect copyright.PENANAkfIh9YDGU7
579Please respect copyright.PENANAybVKOvWJuD
林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。579Please respect copyright.PENANAILdd0UFFUe
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。579Please respect copyright.PENANAnFdoBrFyAB
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。579Please respect copyright.PENANA3P6AyN8emZ
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。579Please respect copyright.PENANAp7Pqn0LhtM
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。579Please respect copyright.PENANApYKiaTWlUJ
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。579Please respect copyright.PENANAWFXR3hVBWz
579Please respect copyright.PENANAuj0szkyp1G
在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。579Please respect copyright.PENANAA6Uit8Arx0
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。579Please respect copyright.PENANATRekW05eHk
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANAQAD62Qyjk0
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAvqxlssMbxf
眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAPpcQBXPXP0
【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。579Please respect copyright.PENANAd6IBuu6gdS
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林579Please respect copyright.PENANABJ2CfDVs7u
這故是關鍵的人物579Please respect copyright.PENANAaKXS1aFJso
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活579Please respect copyright.PENANApdcdiDufZ5
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言579Please respect copyright.PENANACKaZnw2MLQ
579Please respect copyright.PENANAVrtjvNB2xP
「我們的孩子」579Please respect copyright.PENANAF33YTkWAKP
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整579Please respect copyright.PENANAOd66nyRBrE
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。579Please respect copyright.PENANAnVX6wpbKJV
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後579Please respect copyright.PENANAI9nW0ehK9B
也肯定還會有新的故事起點579Please respect copyright.PENANAiDjIrKwZMx
然而天下無不散的宴席579Please respect copyright.PENANAWASGKl47Lx
我們本次故事便到此結束579Please respect copyright.PENANA2GlLjnOKeA
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。579Please respect copyright.PENANANtjLEsznGp
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。579Please respect copyright.PENANAhQRU1r9WsA
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。579Please respect copyright.PENANAzdeXvqop3C
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。579Please respect copyright.PENANApRSh4rFcPi
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAYvSopKYuGU
【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。579Please respect copyright.PENANAGiiRrtKNMI
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。579Please respect copyright.PENANANrwyasPxe3
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。579Please respect copyright.PENANAWEKfaHEpGi
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。579Please respect copyright.PENANAuSIuvgqW2A
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。579Please respect copyright.PENANAEp8xqt8wpw
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANAtPJmH44Hrp
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANAR72fDqhuLl
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。579Please respect copyright.PENANAPlxXDBlmcc
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。579Please respect copyright.PENANAHLei2rkhBW
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。579Please respect copyright.PENANABEFgbPTOA8
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。579Please respect copyright.PENANAbo6yWDfOhk
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANAgAa5iZoC9h
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。579Please respect copyright.PENANAJzJjNajvQb
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?579Please respect copyright.PENANAt7cjtrmEHl
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAyPNjVhmUNj
男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」579Please respect copyright.PENANAXC4uY2iyL7
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAKo7C4r9BCY
【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)579Please respect copyright.PENANAdsbZEESZq4
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。579Please respect copyright.PENANA1IWXAXOU0Y
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。579Please respect copyright.PENANAr31hC5sWAN
而故事線轉回到了從前。579Please respect copyright.PENANAHlvbA23Efk
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
579Please respect copyright.PENANA5vZfxhSfor
【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。579Please respect copyright.PENANAJXEc1gjZ7V
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。579Please respect copyright.PENANAmkIOHpJEDn
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?579Please respect copyright.PENANAdgNfc7TSgE
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?579Please respect copyright.PENANAj8CaTEN7GY
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。579Please respect copyright.PENANACXitK4wbwK
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。579Please respect copyright.PENANAytoPHZny0H
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。579Please respect copyright.PENANAJASBgvLkN9
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。579Please respect copyright.PENANAbDmnvERfMY
這才是常態。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAHdbiuPkFkx
父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。579Please respect copyright.PENANAeBkSLcysYh
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。579Please respect copyright.PENANAfE7yxpFGI2
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。579Please respect copyright.PENANA7W6jNsSxV6
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?579Please respect copyright.PENANAQ3ZKomHHnb
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAypjEkqY9wW
告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。579Please respect copyright.PENANA1YRzPbYzjn
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。579Please respect copyright.PENANARintzIjXB3
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAF2fjFhF8bp
這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAquWJfmH7jt
【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。579Please respect copyright.PENANAHB58Tc3Rd0
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。579Please respect copyright.PENANAmSHE65mawS
至此,幾年前分別以後。579Please respect copyright.PENANAakXnRRGzSi
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。579Please respect copyright.PENANAGCflrKMejS
579Please respect copyright.PENANALbX3PRcQPD
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。579Please respect copyright.PENANAo1buNLerOX
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。579Please respect copyright.PENANAiiUDzxELUi
也是是疾病纏身。579Please respect copyright.PENANAkjFHmlpJLY
也迫不得已,離開了他。579Please respect copyright.PENANAqdMVdWQaNp
579Please respect copyright.PENANARgYNJ6oS65
贈我,是一個約定。579Please respect copyright.PENANA9bqePCHM8c
一個約定券的約定。 579Please respect copyright.PENANAN6uK7fPNhj
而再見之時,人事已非。579Please respect copyright.PENANACc1GRJB1dK
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?579Please respect copyright.PENANAVS46W7TSBq
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579Please respect copyright.PENANAw01iFiTeRj
此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。579Please respect copyright.PENANAg5EgiFyQRg
或許,再見不遠。 579Please respect copyright.PENANAKCNFsfb8k9
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
579Please respect copyright.PENANA2vhY9GyXDl
【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAIhq5wByY6M
女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。579Please respect copyright.PENANA5SXD1qDiJW
就像青春微酸甜那般。579Please respect copyright.PENANA9kBD0j1CzK
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。579Please respect copyright.PENANATLBVPg8K4P
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。579Please respect copyright.PENANAtWlvlxvZrx
579Please respect copyright.PENANAaUy3pJLePy
「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANAvGUA7qaxuj
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。579Please respect copyright.PENANAaVmcQyQb3V
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。579Please respect copyright.PENANACHo6BMPyIv
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。579Please respect copyright.PENANArIsaJ4fum3
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。579Please respect copyright.PENANAVIrJvLXDcK
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。579Please respect copyright.PENANA0azwzutHUZ
579Please respect copyright.PENANATbTFiCrOz8
579Please respect copyright.PENANA2BPykAdmTK
「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。579Please respect copyright.PENANAsmCGTsulNr
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。579Please respect copyright.PENANA9MZkITJiKj
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANAaw5LlXg9Bc
579Please respect copyright.PENANA0HfvtTaWRZ
夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
579Please respect copyright.PENANA6S6GD78qcc
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。579Please respect copyright.PENANAdc9lWHQeyc
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAoxKEG26Htl
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。579Please respect copyright.PENANAHNzIpSqzYi
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。579Please respect copyright.PENANAiQf1qlUt7S
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。579Please respect copyright.PENANAeLb6W1YQb6
579Please respect copyright.PENANAQHFH0h4HLL
最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。579Please respect copyright.PENANAich1EJ6ME0
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAqTSmu1xTsk
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。579Please respect copyright.PENANATnmcKsSrU9
579Please respect copyright.PENANABnZkdagXsM
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。579Please respect copyright.PENANAba4LryfaW5
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。579Please respect copyright.PENANA3ZR3GY4qyf
因那悸動。579Please respect copyright.PENANAtr6xyKQ4sg
往往竟是那瞬間。
579Please respect copyright.PENANANY5mXYMSpg
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。579Please respect copyright.PENANAzjbK0JwISz
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。579Please respect copyright.PENANAe2OV2Qfe7A
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。579Please respect copyright.PENANAgJzrHwZatw
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?579Please respect copyright.PENANAZgt7X0FqSN
579Please respect copyright.PENANASoxzZdduUJ
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。579Please respect copyright.PENANAxmuV2gC3wr
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。579Please respect copyright.PENANAeLsIdoKmHT
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
579Please respect copyright.PENANAuVggfvPhku
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANAhfjGvaBBLy
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANAg99XLRQb2a
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANA1R9Kgtzsd2
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANAWICGZzy7nE
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANARWoGeHfffX
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANAWujc0IFgjr
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANArPyvlR4oPu
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANATooVoV8pKa
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANAgZLxGOLPMc
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
579Please respect copyright.PENANA8Zf3PM5ZgR
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
579Please respect copyright.PENANADeDjKu4HhY
【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
579Please respect copyright.PENANAwgjCvxkexJ
新詩類
579Please respect copyright.PENANAnxZzT2hL3r
【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧579Please respect copyright.PENANA6ILalvqWNl
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍579Please respect copyright.PENANA2z9h62RocB
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)579Please respect copyright.PENANA9OhCSQ4O4O
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單579Please respect copyright.PENANAxkdRmgXTzh
而是是人在食用時能入口即化579Please respect copyright.PENANAMgv5XE93EX
579Please respect copyright.PENANAuAEwj8I8lm
579Please respect copyright.PENANALkJhxOk2lW
「嘗試把心臟調慢」579Please respect copyright.PENANAgGZx2FPs5h
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久579Please respect copyright.PENANAkR3MTDOZgJ
使人不會因為時間的洪流579Please respect copyright.PENANA8lTq2NKWmg
失去了炙熱579Please respect copyright.PENANAAR7LGuF7EV
579Please respect copyright.PENANAsGywulTDMr
579Please respect copyright.PENANAqHDqTgN93V
詩名為《夏,冬眠》579Please respect copyright.PENANAcJHVUdRdQa
但夏季怎麼會有雪579Please respect copyright.PENANApax9XZFSPt
令人加以反思579Please respect copyright.PENANABeumX9CCnT
雪季不該有的畫面579Please respect copyright.PENANAW8r8ALF8V9
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏579Please respect copyright.PENANABYY68DsDQ4
579Please respect copyright.PENANAYj52dktwXH
或許579Please respect copyright.PENANALChKnCxsp0
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣579Please respect copyright.PENANAzilQAksCCt
即便是來年579Please respect copyright.PENANA2YpVuC0gCf
之後的每一年都依然如此
579Please respect copyright.PENANAfxwINN1uba
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。579Please respect copyright.PENANAOULwFSadxx
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。579Please respect copyright.PENANALfQqStSQUN
579Please respect copyright.PENANAuqJGAz5rVc
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。579Please respect copyright.PENANANs3iud278m
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。579Please respect copyright.PENANAVix6s1HnMl
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。579Please respect copyright.PENANAOsA6Qkuk4t
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。579Please respect copyright.PENANAUN0H8G98rM
579Please respect copyright.PENANAg4ezaP6Cot
景物依然,妳卻不然。579Please respect copyright.PENANAqOJ6UPnSnH
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。579Please respect copyright.PENANAcW1KzgTUeq
更多的是此刻的情殤。579Please respect copyright.PENANA9sSvlUcr4o
579Please respect copyright.PENANAEfBjNqNJp2
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。579Please respect copyright.PENANAj3tg3MSmWE
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANAquWpbFsI9X
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANA2B6QOSzV0e
579Please respect copyright.PENANATsugMCbC54
579Please respect copyright.PENANAFFPfeJI0vU
夏季,這絢麗。579Please respect copyright.PENANA1o0n2rsIIJ
如曇花一現的煙花。579Please respect copyright.PENANAhiom1np1LM
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
579Please respect copyright.PENANAmzdiBNRdlO
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。579Please respect copyright.PENANAQwcGZtCShQ
同如起、轉、合三處意境。579Please respect copyright.PENANAYX84A71yOH
579Please respect copyright.PENANAxzD8BtKWXq
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。579Please respect copyright.PENANAvmwN4Ce8fE
579Please respect copyright.PENANAtc9smZwaRC
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。579Please respect copyright.PENANAkHBozqiiQg
579Please respect copyright.PENANAJyo0yqvSib
卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
579Please respect copyright.PENANAac88ZM0Gxk
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴579Please respect copyright.PENANAmlZzHtoFv4
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開579Please respect copyright.PENANA4wzZ4SL8r2
579Please respect copyright.PENANASEOmiHr6xN
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿579Please respect copyright.PENANAy0Z8OlOxAr
句中江畔相隨579Please respect copyright.PENANASeOEkSa9ZU
卻又未知天意是何在579Please respect copyright.PENANAf6QjvOu68M
579Please respect copyright.PENANAFh9akPxtlw
即便是狂嘯 悲歌579Please respect copyright.PENANAI0UeSBUqzd
天上繁星 銀河579Please respect copyright.PENANAiDmSN5IbHb
也僅是萬千世界的一粟579Please respect copyright.PENANANRzoWgD12Q
卻找不出能取掉你的其一579Please respect copyright.PENANAnhESNC80kA
579Please respect copyright.PENANAmednJp3yeg
從回到閣樓579Please respect copyright.PENANASlo6ZbLCCK
又再次漫步獨醉579Please respect copyright.PENANA9kY4IuqjcU
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉579Please respect copyright.PENANAWNbfMo6HJu
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉579Please respect copyright.PENANAWszq3utKgd
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了579Please respect copyright.PENANAjSp3f33CXP
579Please respect copyright.PENANAr37D9IS3I4
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路579Please respect copyright.PENANATlj0KNtsP0
也不過只是再次三世579Please respect copyright.PENANAVPMvFP9LAv
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
579Please respect copyright.PENANAXphcLII8zf
【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。579Please respect copyright.PENANAHt6Rmh6c2l
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。579Please respect copyright.PENANAvQLyNvPdnT
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。579Please respect copyright.PENANAQlRd8jBOQU
(感謝科普。)579Please respect copyright.PENANAXSZo5eO6VY
579Please respect copyright.PENANAWkLw4lMnD6
然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。579Please respect copyright.PENANA0lYrQmzCED
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。579Please respect copyright.PENANAOR2NAMd6DY
579Please respect copyright.PENANAhKUExbrLik
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。579Please respect copyright.PENANAD3SdQs639p
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。579Please respect copyright.PENANAStfupOvVsg
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。579Please respect copyright.PENANA0Pml5JuTYy
579Please respect copyright.PENANAmBVgoqq2yo
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。579Please respect copyright.PENANA9N8BoQ2DWD
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。579Please respect copyright.PENANAhwHuM9ANRU
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。579Please respect copyright.PENANAcAVfogIeu1
579Please respect copyright.PENANAv2JtzG9SMN
而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAX19mtUFvyM
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAYqcIxkmFXd
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。579Please respect copyright.PENANAbntcLivcda
579Please respect copyright.PENANAAJd8yowuFF
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。579Please respect copyright.PENANAY9O1YbBZhx
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
579Please respect copyright.PENANAdm6YZuEtWl
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?579Please respect copyright.PENANAxN05B31xYZ
579Please respect copyright.PENANAZFCcvYEYCP
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。579Please respect copyright.PENANAHC3FnFRINt
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。579Please respect copyright.PENANALXYUgZkgmz
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。579Please respect copyright.PENANAqJSff2kRxU
579Please respect copyright.PENANAhv2IeQYIhk
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」579Please respect copyright.PENANAB54fVloaQA
579Please respect copyright.PENANAxR6zhD1pfM
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。579Please respect copyright.PENANAvn4xj8px39
579Please respect copyright.PENANAKUlq8EgQHi
前世,已放下。579Please respect copyright.PENANAyleA1NgiWs
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。579Please respect copyright.PENANA8sNoKauZid
579Please respect copyright.PENANAoejzrYZCUx
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAdmQNdTTtQO
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。579Please respect copyright.PENANAqSqJVP43rv
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:579Please respect copyright.PENANA0dyG3j6SDN
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」579Please respect copyright.PENANA1IpDlkZSgp
579Please respect copyright.PENANA2gvU3beitn
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。579Please respect copyright.PENANAG89bv4No7e
越是得來不易。579Please respect copyright.PENANAVk1GfCC7QF
579Please respect copyright.PENANAiqtQDCFXDV
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。579Please respect copyright.PENANADQASqvQGIN
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。579Please respect copyright.PENANAeHwh92gt7x
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAT1osQo5BOG
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。579Please respect copyright.PENANAsYCjcNFPjL
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。579Please respect copyright.PENANAa9oIsLRlb2
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。579Please respect copyright.PENANA0WgsEd7PAn
如我們未盡的緣分這般。579Please respect copyright.PENANASAZW1IiGOu
579Please respect copyright.PENANA6Z1HTEMMUr
579Please respect copyright.PENANASZiMVccK0Q
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。579Please respect copyright.PENANARXKHgBsw4D
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。579Please respect copyright.PENANA2qSIQujObP
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。579Please respect copyright.PENANA8jV5oxzyGD
579Please respect copyright.PENANAZS7jdQ2KMj
579Please respect copyright.PENANA3eTOfefnZw
妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。579Please respect copyright.PENANAyDvZXvD8ot
我並不知情。579Please respect copyright.PENANAl5znwYvwDD
也不再無從得知。579Please respect copyright.PENANAvftXsvP3tp
579Please respect copyright.PENANA011dHCxZHK
579Please respect copyright.PENANAwNJ9asyX9o
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。579Please respect copyright.PENANA0ubn66MaJn
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」579Please respect copyright.PENANAUU2lbncNkd
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。579Please respect copyright.PENANAggk1aHiMGf
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。579Please respect copyright.PENANA0DjnM3X90S
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視579Please respect copyright.PENANAOwKch9a5LT
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛579Please respect copyright.PENANAl4y9op09Ql
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待579Please respect copyright.PENANAkRhM83oSMi
579Please respect copyright.PENANApzTriHcGKo
而在萬里無雲的日常579Please respect copyright.PENANAh1Gu1W16Ga
大地照耀出了你的光芒579Please respect copyright.PENANAkO7Qbyao5a
只想著短暫沒有你的存在579Please respect copyright.PENANAK95iiboxKz
與緬懷影子的並行579Please respect copyright.PENANAYeOMeX1YYT
579Please respect copyright.PENANA7jADGgDg5o
而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手579Please respect copyright.PENANAsQNcBN07sU
敲響了人群一日的序幕579Please respect copyright.PENANAjCpN15gx2V
島與海579Please respect copyright.PENANAQLvSQuwS44
又為何區分你、我呢579Please respect copyright.PENANAJKCrAEZrm0
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你579Please respect copyright.PENANAbgcLkzaZsb
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隨著四季的變化579Please respect copyright.PENANAUwAcL3cGRs
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時579Please respect copyright.PENANAv1zDtGRtCG
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩579Please respect copyright.PENANAQcT7VTcrjE
詩意要較為薄弱579Please respect copyright.PENANAPnjLuGOU0Y
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分579Please respect copyright.PENANAtzNJaWNs9n
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感579Please respect copyright.PENANADTaj76hiJy
579Please respect copyright.PENANAbjHKs1Ye9O
【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。579Please respect copyright.PENANAX0KMnyWak0
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。579Please respect copyright.PENANAzoaTRlrMPh
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。579Please respect copyright.PENANAt2rStjTVtu
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。579Please respect copyright.PENANA2T1ejNBj2o
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。579Please respect copyright.PENANA4i13NBovLb
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。579Please respect copyright.PENANACmco8wB7pF
579Please respect copyright.PENANAKg8LkwThBx
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。579Please respect copyright.PENANAlJytAiU8bJ
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。579Please respect copyright.PENANAaJNuUujGDx
每個人的角度皆為不同。579Please respect copyright.PENANAiuEcaWVY4J
579Please respect copyright.PENANAJlxoKzg4xr
有人感受深刻,579Please respect copyright.PENANA8tMwU7DxEq
有人無感,579Please respect copyright.PENANAGD4sedHi6k
各有差異。579Please respect copyright.PENANAzAHSGrOvMP
579Please respect copyright.PENANAJF8PuWw9Uy
而我僅是那茫茫人海中,579Please respect copyright.PENANAy1YLIQ4ovm
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
579Please respect copyright.PENANA2XzvOy3MPM
【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。579Please respect copyright.PENANAJIYddL1SZL
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。579Please respect copyright.PENANAzm19H80vHq
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。579Please respect copyright.PENANAQT6RIrsfa3
579Please respect copyright.PENANAxRnAXzQSxT
柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
579Please respect copyright.PENANALax7MJWpMp
【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。579Please respect copyright.PENANA5lN4RStCEY
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。579Please respect copyright.PENANALUSYJFyCUc
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。579Please respect copyright.PENANAqWO5VClRIn
579Please respect copyright.PENANAiqne0SIDrU
579Please respect copyright.PENANAOz4W8GGTeW
每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。579Please respect copyright.PENANAfqUeZhrF1L
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。579Please respect copyright.PENANAYhjUNK4h42
579Please respect copyright.PENANAXcdErZJGiy
也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。579Please respect copyright.PENANAtVBzBScBFM
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。579Please respect copyright.PENANAL4AU6Urnud
579Please respect copyright.PENANAY2MPnlGo91
偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。579Please respect copyright.PENANAdpPZA1xU6x
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。579Please respect copyright.PENANAiWrhWbXnZV
579Please respect copyright.PENANAfLhKSY0jOe
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七夕。579Please respect copyright.PENANAPin2JbgPWe
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。579Please respect copyright.PENANAbhbJMQ9Iu0
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。579Please respect copyright.PENANAhaeV5SYX7L
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
579Please respect copyright.PENANAgVZAHRgg3r
【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩579Please respect copyright.PENANAT3tzGgcZie
用道地口吻方式呈現579Please respect copyright.PENANAejxN3RiHiR
別有一番令人感同身受的味道579Please respect copyright.PENANAVEQZ68Z2uV
579Please respect copyright.PENANAz1FPuSNn1d
華麗的新詩固然有深沈579Please respect copyright.PENANA0oiQfYn3Sx
反覆咀嚼的口感579Please respect copyright.PENANA874qfccwsK
但相較於打油詩579Please respect copyright.PENANA1zUcAVMW0K
卻更能反映生活上的記趣579Please respect copyright.PENANAebMLp3Wi6G
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!579Please respect copyright.PENANAJoVvzoFZlg
579Please respect copyright.PENANAlfwhZgWBwt
夏季沉悶、炙熱579Please respect copyright.PENANAV1beeYfHLT
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情579Please respect copyright.PENANALgHMjrkoGm
保持理性與忍耐579Please respect copyright.PENANAbyv4Un6zJl
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
579Please respect copyright.PENANAyncWcuzvTn
抬起頭來579Please respect copyright.PENANA4WWBXkn6Tc
深深吸一口氣579Please respect copyright.PENANA5T1eNwp8FU
靜下來看一下周遭的事物579Please respect copyright.PENANAF3BbYiMU0c
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。579Please respect copyright.PENANAiROyuV3a1k
一種相思,兩處閒愁。579Please respect copyright.PENANApK12xmKB5z
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。579Please respect copyright.PENANA7R800pYOlD
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?579Please respect copyright.PENANATkmVCT0hrW
579Please respect copyright.PENANARHw7jy4Fj0
獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。579Please respect copyright.PENANAOsofS8maNo
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。579Please respect copyright.PENANAkjZmYoaMpN
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 579Please respect copyright.PENANAQSVT258wwn
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。579Please respect copyright.PENANA4NagVVEeCU
579Please respect copyright.PENANArvxRcibRcH
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。579Please respect copyright.PENANAomK6cdeQ8R
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。579Please respect copyright.PENANAhJxkMLXqvw
579Please respect copyright.PENANARUUG9uQLxJ
我們仍未可知。579Please respect copyright.PENANAJNv94xx2Mp
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
579Please respect copyright.PENANA6oDQMfrWJJ
【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
579Please respect copyright.PENANACjernlPSgM
【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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579Please respect copyright.PENANALJCxw3GPFj
本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~579Please respect copyright.PENANAgh0u1JIg3v