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翻譯裡的共情

弄墨

Jul 4, 2022

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這次跟大家分享五月天《我不願讓你一個人》的歌詞翻譯練習。

網上大多版本用的是I don't want to let you be alone，這裡我用了在英語世界裡更自然、而且語氣更難捨難離的I don't want to leave you alone。翻譯感情細膩的文字時，除了客觀技巧以外，更需要和原文以及原作者共情，才能譯出同樣感染人心的文字。

作詞：阿信

作曲：阿信冠佑

翻譯：弄墨

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你說呢，明知你不在還是會問

“What would you say?” I ask, even though you aren't there

空氣，卻不能代替你出聲

The air cannot speak on your behalf

習慣，像永不癒合的固執傷痕

Habits are stubborn wounds that never heal

一思念就撕裂靈魂

tearing my soul apart whenever I start missing you

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把相片讓你能保存多洗一本

I get an extra album for you to keep

毛衣，也為你準備多一層

and an extra sweater for you to keep warm

但是你孤單時刻安慰的體溫

Yet, when you’re lonely and need comforting warmth

怎麼為你多留一份

how do I reserve it for you?

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我不願讓你一個人，一個人在人海浮沉

I don’t want to leave you alone drifting in the sea of people

我不願你獨自走過風雨的時分

I don’t want to leave you alone walking through the storms

我不願讓你一個人，承受這世界的殘忍

I don’t want to leave you alone suffering in this cruel world

我不願眼淚陪你到永恆

I don’t want tears going along with you till eternity

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你走後，愛情的遺跡像是空城

When you're gone, the remains of our love a forsaken town

遺落，你杯子手套和笑聲

where your cup, gloves and laughter reside

最後，你只帶走你脆弱和單純

In the end, you brought your delicacy and innocence with you

和我最放不下的人

together with the person I can't let go of

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也許未來，你會找到懂你疼你更好的人

Perhaps someday you’ll find a better one who knows you and loves you

下段旅程，你一定要更幸福豐盛

Your next journey must be richer and more blissful

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我不願讓你一個人，一個人在人海浮沉

I don’t want to leave you alone drifting in the sea of people

我不願你獨自走過風雨的時分

I don’t want to leave you alone walking through the storms

我不願讓你一個人，承受這世界的殘忍

I don’t want to leave you alone suffering in this cruel world

我不願眼淚陪你到永恆

I don’t want tears going along with you till eternity

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你說呢，明知你不在還是會問

“What would you say?” I ask, even though you aren't there

只因，習慣你滿足的眼神

Only because I'm used to your eyes gleaming in satisfaction

只是，我最後一個奢求的可能，只求你有快樂人生

My last, perhaps extravagant wish, is for you to live a happy life

只求命運帶你去一段全新的旅程

All I wish is that you are taken on a whole new journey

往幸福的天涯飛奔

Speeding towards a world of happiness

別回頭就往前飛奔

Please don’t look back, just go forward

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請忘了我還一個人

Please forget that I'm still alone

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