大家早安,歷經了數月的作品賞析與語評,終於在今天完成了總結。
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(呼、呼...這根本是大工程,一個人要消化真的不容易阿。)
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對了,每一篇文章都是你們的用心之作。
魚魚,都認真的給予了短評,如有錯評之處,請多家見諒!!
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下面,針對本次的第三期的創作挑戰,區分為兩大類獎項,合計26個獎賞,情況分述如下:
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小說類943Please respect copyright.PENANAa2umJCVbRs
【NO.1】943Please respect copyright.PENANAtwpwdozb0E
蕗舟Lunoe943Please respect copyright.PENANALH3TRRLQdw
#152 憂鬱的櫥窗模特兒943Please respect copyright.PENANApsT9ogOiun
【初評】
擬物為人,卻不料真的是人,可把我驚呆了。943Please respect copyright.PENANAmPy7OLfxrC
文末的轉變,十分有勁,卻有一種鶴立雞群的創新感。943Please respect copyright.PENANAq7sKAaUoeO
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冬季,自古便是憂鬱的季節,即便在世界某一處的角落,我們也沒法躲避那世間的萬有定律。943Please respect copyright.PENANAniCiZR3SJE
而蕗舟大藉由假人模特兒的引頸期盼,來襯托出等待著一整個冬季未到時的良人皈依。943Please respect copyright.PENANAJvUOpwo2j7
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終究,那個男人還是回來了。943Please respect copyright.PENANAWfcCgeAQyu
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銀色喜悅,銀色象徵著高貴、永恆,卻如同我們每個人心中,不可取代的純潔,想展現出的特質。943Please respect copyright.PENANAxWiGEUtRaX
然而,眾多人群來來往往,卻無一人可識破真人的所扮演,而如同世俗,人們往往只看表面,卻無法深入思索真實的涵義。943Please respect copyright.PENANANcF3nPmlHL
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但願,此刻的我,也能尋覓到內心真正的期望。943Please respect copyright.PENANATmTAQXSyD1
【複評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAqEFoHO9K1O
在字數完美落在千字之下,故事新穎並且傳達出角色的心思,在183部作品中,是幾部少數能透過故事的本身去探討另外一層含意的作品。
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【NO.2】943Please respect copyright.PENANAwlmQC4NemD
Historia943Please respect copyright.PENANA00bW1kuWKu
#34 我給獵物的祕密情書943Please respect copyright.PENANASrKriaHeB9
#38 聽話忠犬的懊悔日記943Please respect copyright.PENANA3M9zYa40Yj
#42 新聞媒體的社會報導943Please respect copyright.PENANAcI2sp76XBN
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【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAYp9qdj0FcN
來回讀過了幾遍,我嘗試想過了兩種劇本:943Please respect copyright.PENANAUqv85S8DAg
(一)兩人原是相戀多年的戀人,但因求學從而相隔遠距離的兩地,因為女生周遭多出了新的異性朋友,兩人的熱度進而變的冷卻黯淡,也許,愛意早已蕩然無存。943Please respect copyright.PENANAT6rvIdkV9h
因為一絲的醋意,接續而來的紙條事件,把兩人僅存的那點信任完全的打破了,即便是今年聖誕節還見上一面,我更覺得完全不需要了。943Please respect copyright.PENANAbutIWDtlsR
多的都只有無盡的沉默與尷尬,見不如不見、此時無聲勝過有聲。943Please respect copyright.PENANAi4M3DBPonJ
另外,針對紙條事件,也許還有著第三個男生從中作祟,更是個心機的布局,從而回到了現實面,這個人一次解決了兩個對手(?),才稱的是上本劇最大的贏家。943Please respect copyright.PENANAjzpuNurXdY
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(二)作為獵物,或許,這個人根本與采筑沒那種熟識的關係,而是個單戀的愛慕者。943Please respect copyright.PENANAE17S3Xe39f
第一段,作為從旁觀察的男人,他對於郭睿傑的醋意如同此生大敵,而「我很愛你」已到了病態般的自喃。943Please respect copyright.PENANAJPq22tXPJB
第二段,也許身為同班上的某位同學,一個日常的玩笑「與異性朋友」保持距離,不會進一步的發展,卻讓他耿耿於懷,早已埋下了這枚炸彈的引線,直至紙條事件的出現。943Please respect copyright.PENANAQSiJW0iZgQ
第三段,就是他把這些東西透過某些手段,送至到了郭睿傑的父母手上,進而處理了眼神的對手。943Please respect copyright.PENANAgXTCqpPoFk
末段,以狩獵者的視角,對這個獵物發出了宣言,「聖誕節的這一天」我必獵妳來收尾。943Please respect copyright.PENANAhBGinua8py
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興許,只是我的過度解讀,但對於采筑來說,都難以用上好心情來面對這個寒冬了。943Please respect copyright.PENANAn8Mp6EmcLe
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采筑的懵懂建構在她內心的小小世界,卻在給了翰以後,一切都生變了。不僅僅只是貪婪,更多的是威脅。943Please respect copyright.PENANA1kUbcvlviq
原來愛,已成了單純的肉體關係,但更多的卻如母狗般的忠於主人,直至主子失去了興致。943Please respect copyright.PENANACEQ8k1x7QC
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而最後一個自己能傾訴的睿傑也離去,這對於采筑來說要是多麼的徬徨。同時間,反客為主,第一章節的男主,從一位溫柔善良的他,轉變為如人狼般的教師。943Please respect copyright.PENANA4NPqv64SvL
帶入了故事另外一波高潮。943Please respect copyright.PENANAiNoX8z9Y9X
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善惡到頭終有報,隨著時間的推移,惡行將被繩之以法。943Please respect copyright.PENANA7EY2z4mmdC
或許,出頭的那人將被社會與世人討伐,卻能拯救更多人於水火之中。943Please respect copyright.PENANAZ629EZC0dI
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一文當中正如,最近社會頭條「職場性騷擾」的案子層出不窮,而誰又真的敢面對社會不公?943Please respect copyright.PENANARbV8r5mn50
怕失去了飯碗?943Please respect copyright.PENANAFoFK36VtpD
怕丟失了顏面?943Please respect copyright.PENANA1Kk3Ce11rD
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以女子的自表,更多地闡述出是這些年來受盡的委屈,與下定決心切斷扭曲的愛。943Please respect copyright.PENANAVIux4Fbq6d
小女孩終究會長大,蝴蝶與百合終究會死去和凋零,如兒時情景漸行漸遠。943Please respect copyright.PENANALnYMYTne37
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文末,我見識到了是勇敢更甚於愛戀,而即便軀體早已殘破,但心魔的糾結卻在這一刻化作了灰燼。943Please respect copyright.PENANAYCwqPXc3Xj
如隱喻的冬,隨之拂袖揮去。943Please respect copyright.PENANA1bBiBleQBY
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【複評】943Please respect copyright.PENANANoSWbM45MZ
Historia三部曲的複雜度在183部作品中,絕對能稱得上是矛列前茅,在透過采筑與翰的視角,引領出教師扭曲的人性,與讓大眾無法接受的事實。
用字上簡明扼要,故事完整,而分至三篇幅寫作,在用字上超過千字,故此將其評比為第二名。
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【NO.3】943Please respect copyright.PENANAs1fFoDNG2K
#165《外套》943Please respect copyright.PENANAOwW3DaStID
AnTeD943Please respect copyright.PENANAb97D0Hu4uh
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【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAWjwFpLER0c
跟隨著的故事開頭,都快被故事主角的他,那絲絲片點細膩的舉止,差點沒要做死自己的衝動了。943Please respect copyright.PENANAT1csZyczNl
然而,作為首次約會的她更是思慮成熟不已,僅只作為冰凍發寒的手掌都尚可觀察入微,如此相伴,可謂夫復何求?943Please respect copyright.PENANAVHUu1ncfyl
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男女在戀愛中所在意的角度本就不同,而在AnTeD大的作品中,更可感受到景色間的優美、兩人間美好的細膩互動,皆可輕易波動了正在欣賞這篇文章的我們,是如此暖和,是否這件外套遞給的已非男主,而是我們呢?943Please respect copyright.PENANATyLB10Mv0w
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後續,兩人是否走下去不得而知,但可以知道的是,男生的心中此生怕是再難以忘懷這場約會了。943Please respect copyright.PENANADHYSQxGvYg
【複評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAgkXBQwe6Ee
本篇作品用字流暢,然帶入卻是極強,讓人如同身歷其境,故事在183部中屬冬季中的愛戀系列,而應景於本創挑的冬季戀愛精神,故此將推至第三名。
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【NO.4】943Please respect copyright.PENANAlZFfJRkhg9
落花943Please respect copyright.PENANAAaKLA8XX1x
#84 冬梅943Please respect copyright.PENANA3BUVDHb2nZ
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【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAvi6y0rReT8
「落花大的深情碰碰車,總能無情地不斷往前駛來,即便在侷限於千字的顛簸路上,也能如履平地。」寂魚此刻正在螢幕前,思索著該如何評判,這一回合的短評,但,最主要還是因為我自己也想上車車。943Please respect copyright.PENANAAiwqH7L1oI
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或許是女子早已離世遠去,抑或是,女子熱情不再,追求新刺激,拋下了顏禾而去,但我更願為是後者,至少還有今世再見的機會。943Please respect copyright.PENANAZbhmhHUgI5
剪不斷,理還不斷地來亂;知己已是難得可見,尤以是在床上這方面,簡直如稀世珍寶,顏禾或許這輩子都將會背負著,這一無法忘懷的情感走向墳墓,如他那抹除不掉的手腕刺青,這是全文中最令人難以忘懷的兩人情感互動。943Please respect copyright.PENANANqSPxXlL3b
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而在用詞方面,魚魚莫過於深愛著「冬梅」點點開、點點落,唯美同時具備浪漫氣息,雖是敘述著依人離去的悲落心情,卻又能反覆再次咀嚼前文的激情畫面,主題仍又帶回了令人印象深刻的情密繾綣之中。943Please respect copyright.PENANANgqmSdtDPM
寒冬似乎還未走完,而葉去早已落得冷清枯寂,這樣悲愁的深情,只能在記憶中朦朧找尋回來了,想必即便未來再有身軀契合的對象,也不見得能在情感上填補這個空洞。943Please respect copyright.PENANAAatMv76OiE
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僅只希望,春季晨曦,可以多帶有些這片愁的滋味。943Please respect copyright.PENANAqAfS8fmlAo
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與#84冬梅那篇比對,這期間度過了人生好幾個階段,也同時經歷了這個創作挑戰上百篇的短評,希望這次的評論能更加客觀。943Please respect copyright.PENANAJAtlZAnj5F
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與前篇比對,#135窒愛著重在敘述對於兩人"鬥牛"方面的對手戲,尤以巴著籃球不斷進出籃框粗暴與挑逗對手的話語,更是讓人意猶未盡,想多看幾次秦白楓上籃的那種慾望。943Please respect copyright.PENANAD3p0CxeUj1
在形容黃宣麓方面,雖有「他」這個字眼帶給我閱讀時的幾分困惑,但在言情方面涉獵多年的讀者,絕對不會在意這一點點的小瑕疵,反倒如果沒有在尾段所出現的「後框」一詞,我都覺得「他」與「她」的疑問。943Please respect copyright.PENANAVQSsiAsuPt
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...等等。943Please respect copyright.PENANA13u1BPGNRY
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...難道,真的是「他」。冷汗再度直流,電流直擊我內心最後的那道防線,我被破防了,是我那僅存的矜持。943Please respect copyright.PENANAluiMgI1gUM
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鬥牛的賽事,在短篇後段,在一場次隱約又悄悄地敲響了起來,只是眾多讀者肯定想一窺究竟絕不止步於此。943Please respect copyright.PENANA5TtZmW1Uor
下筆於此,魚魚完全認定這篇球賽不僅有「實用」這番解析,更是有著用詞優美的美譽,至於兩人是否僅是短暫的球場上過客,我們早就不在乎了。943Please respect copyright.PENANAIVUdJBlZAB
畢竟,讀者早就享受完了這篇萬用好文。943Please respect copyright.PENANAMy192AcWKN
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期待,還能再見其他選手上場的好球賽。943Please respect copyright.PENANAeTg0rAkpP2
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【NO.5】943Please respect copyright.PENANA5cHZEC8HjE
余軍943Please respect copyright.PENANAYs9xg3OEFK
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【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAdf4qVnQJGz
這些在地下生存的後代人們,早已走不出這片地球末日的殘存之地,而這卻也是物種的悲歌。943Please respect copyright.PENANA5lG24OV4n7
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即便孩童真能跨出百里外搜尋到生物與傳說的綠洲又當如何?943Please respect copyright.PENANAhViAEbB4CM
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地底人民,或許早已不敢再走出溫室,也或許科技再也舉步維艱的地步了。943Please respect copyright.PENANADqaYam84wP
即便突破了,又到了陰謀論的展開,暗中祕密破壞成功突破的人與機器也說不定。943Please respect copyright.PENANA7PyjD5MRnS
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然而這一切,殊不知都是人們自己所造成的結果。943Please respect copyright.PENANAthKS5D3p74
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【NO.6】943Please respect copyright.PENANAA3XbkEfv0n
吟遊C人943Please respect copyright.PENANAhigtTigDk3
171-應該埋藏在雪地裡的珍貴的遺憾943Please respect copyright.PENANAngCyMlUJso
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【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAh5fXKb0PmE
以奇幻鋪敘來說,C大的伏筆非常順暢,讀起來像泡在溫泉暖和身子,享受冬季反差的那絲溫和感受。943Please respect copyright.PENANAHraIFC3Czi
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以極光前後呼應點題,「極光」是故事的羈絆,因其而再續前緣,也在最後一刻畫下句話。943Please respect copyright.PENANAOn6LopM3Gw
法特,是傭兵隊長也同為年少時期的異性好友,此刻,更多的是彼此間相互緬懷的歲月靜好。943Please respect copyright.PENANArKdk6E2jsC
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不論是否在劍與魔法的世界,抑或是,現實生活中,再臨自己的初戀那是個想將對方的手給牽繫起來的心思,是如此的妄想。943Please respect copyright.PENANASzAnMNBbQl
法特,或許能憑藉自身異能,把整個小隊都滅了也說不然,如今自追隨拜月女神後,早已身不由己。943Please respect copyright.PENANA97J7MDSncp
緣分再次出現,或許,只要他的一句「與我共度下半輩子吧?」說不定,兩人可背負上世界的罵名,卻可擁有法特自己的理想生活。943Please respect copyright.PENANAf0CQ0GM1Td
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可當光逐漸畫下了無際的星空,他卻不自覺沒有察覺出,希梅娜的眼角邊也同為畫下一記淺稀的淚痕。943Please respect copyright.PENANAsbMU8Q7r7P
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【NO.7】
無元人943Please respect copyright.PENANAKQsK9nY4Az
#112-失去一切的冬日943Please respect copyright.PENANArxI3nYF0Tw
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【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANACGCFgWvG4H
方隸臣在告白失敗了以後,以那極盡自虐形式追尋自愛的表現。943Please respect copyright.PENANA2xO6nfOOT4
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以魚死網破,同歸於盡把自己此生所愛保留了下來,在旁人眼底,或許,人性早已扭曲抹滅,已然沒有了救治的希望。943Please respect copyright.PENANAe5JWPxRZWl
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而另一方面,卻向自己所愛表達,自己一生鍾愛獨一人的覺悟。943Please respect copyright.PENANAWNJ2r3Vz0I
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可嘆。人世間,卻多數時候都要以悲劇收場。943Please respect copyright.PENANAWe7W8afZot
我們的初戀,又有幾人是美好甜蜜的呢?943Please respect copyright.PENANA119hbC5ZFP
這個平安夜,白雪緩緩飄落在兩具血泊軀殼上。而這終究算是得到了一切,還是算失去了一切呢?943Please respect copyright.PENANAfQ745kW0MB
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【NO.8】943Please respect copyright.PENANANb29qRMxHQ
胤宸943Please respect copyright.PENANAJz3P8X5SGt
#69 藍鬍子的暖冬943Please respect copyright.PENANAOLmfvHS8TX
943Please respect copyright.PENANA0zvRcnpUSR
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAzOO10DlbSR
輪迴幾世也僅只在意著妳,而像這冥冥之中早已注定的事,又會有誰能猜測的到呢。943Please respect copyright.PENANAaPsRsuOczA
943Please respect copyright.PENANAUDQ5Jr8oQk
從優美的場色敘寫到純情、激情、疑惑、恐懼等等,直到故事後段的轉折都帶著令觀眾想打開這潘朵拉盒子的衝動。943Please respect copyright.PENANAlNZwKI0MJV
943Please respect copyright.PENANAjnb7JJyZcY
開篇我卻從未能料想到這竟是帶有點令人顫抖害怕的恐怖愛情小說,確實有些被驚嚇到,可再回頭反覆雋永,卻發現藍景墨早已埋下伏筆,《格林童話》裡的《藍鬍子》篇章,便是如同那潘朵拉,經不起誘惑的將不開屬於自己知道的秘密給探索,終究會走入命運的分歧。943Please respect copyright.PENANAXImSywy73y
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但現實而論,又能有多少人能經得起這般誘惑呢?943Please respect copyright.PENANAVEOYBfjP7q
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【NO.9】
#104 男人也期待著白馬公主943Please respect copyright.PENANASyVYwl1d9c
943Please respect copyright.PENANA9xdGdZfoAI
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANADMkOQdY6ub
失而復得,再去失去的萬惡循環,是天道不測,造化弄人。943Please respect copyright.PENANA0Gzxp0WoQY
唯有莉莉知道,只是莉莉無奈無人知曉。943Please respect copyright.PENANA8htL0s0SWu
如果說此事發生在我們自身,那我們會選擇結束這段旅程,割捨痛苦循環嗎?943Please respect copyright.PENANA6GFI4GBKUe
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因為知道了憶草的喜好、因為知道了憶草的狀況、因為知道了他所知道的問題。943Please respect copyright.PENANA13hfngYkfw
所以便選擇了留下。943Please respect copyright.PENANATGYWpJMxNF
943Please respect copyright.PENANAVtIkUny2FY
我們從文字中看出了笑具大的細膩之處,想藉由不斷挑戰著重複的一道困難,卻也勇敢直往的衝勁。943Please respect copyright.PENANAs3lr2ROsZt
好比如,此刻的莉莉,深嘆一起,闔眼睜眼對著一臉疑惑的他,再次開口說道:「你好!我喜歡你,請務必和我交往!」943Please respect copyright.PENANA9tvUiZr3bc
943Please respect copyright.PENANAFV15rFYRSB
反覆讀取文章,字句雋永,可以說是容易敲醒內心那一塊柔軟的心田。943Please respect copyright.PENANAZHkPtiirPR
943Please respect copyright.PENANAVfg8eYblYw
【NO.10】943Please respect copyright.PENANAOP8iYug9LU
逆流而上943Please respect copyright.PENANA5OUGzG9NU0
#132 #143 #160〈逃出香港外番I穿花蝴蝶〉上、中、下篇
943Please respect copyright.PENANA2KBbWOOb9J
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAVu3T4B8HoO
優美的景色敘述,讓我閱讀間偶然沈醉在故事的情境裡。943Please respect copyright.PENANAfrJNJWDXhG
走在與原先不符期待的曼徹斯特街道,片段的字句中我聞出區穎的一絲無奈感。943Please respect copyright.PENANA3mx4j9jwdE
943Please respect copyright.PENANAam5BOL1TkE
尾段,突然出現的黑夏克,會讓我想去了解那是什麼生物?943Please respect copyright.PENANAuXfDjgoRmT
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歌曲聲再次響起。943Please respect copyright.PENANAXVkayv2O0I
原來黑夏克,竟是隻惡靈(?),看到這地方轉折處還有那名夾藏著刀的渣男,意外地似乎有點熱血。943Please respect copyright.PENANAY57BNGAlZI
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故事後,寫道了穿花蝴蝶的伏筆,為故事延伸下一篇的精彩開端。943Please respect copyright.PENANA1GKbYX6gkB
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竟還有技能的設定嗎?943Please respect copyright.PENANADzWAUPFu4t
943Please respect copyright.PENANAttxnAe6dX2
其實透過片段,我能明顯感受到這部作品用詞非常優美,故事敘述也到位,雖然節錄中段的地方,我仍舊銜接不太起來,而我卻可在女孩飛去香港的同時,剎那明白了逃出香港的意思。943Please respect copyright.PENANAwdGYBgvNOI
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【佳作1】943Please respect copyright.PENANAEXYBFb0zf7
十三郎943Please respect copyright.PENANAwcSbrzh1aY
#02 我們再談一次戀愛吧943Please respect copyright.PENANALhKkdHQx7d
943Please respect copyright.PENANARR7D6f1OjW
【佳作2】943Please respect copyright.PENANAdPkN06oiCA
mi-na-mi943Please respect copyright.PENANAErGTrdCbkM
#40 蒙特利爾的冬季 943Please respect copyright.PENANAOsnfVP9l6N
943Please respect copyright.PENANAfXZmhzoJfc
【佳作3】943Please respect copyright.PENANAqYv52Bh7Z8
清夢943Please respect copyright.PENANA7yfZB72uhT
#66 寒冬中的睡前故事 943Please respect copyright.PENANAPceLjRfvF0
943Please respect copyright.PENANA9Mf06oLQe3
【佳作4】943Please respect copyright.PENANASCeTximwCe
KLC943Please respect copyright.PENANAgBC8a4EV8c
#118 冬與櫻943Please respect copyright.PENANAvBsnYTPsfM
943Please respect copyright.PENANATVCAtaMfSC
【佳作5】943Please respect copyright.PENANApq7Ccycqfu
沙發王的故事943Please respect copyright.PENANAxZH2VWXMh3
#10 冬天過後943Please respect copyright.PENANAcLK9hjKAMe
943Please respect copyright.PENANAsOrlassLBW
【佳作6】943Please respect copyright.PENANA0g2eECcBM2
伍拾陸943Please respect copyright.PENANAgjy8OuWprm
#105 你這麼喜歡愛撒嬌的貓咪,會不會也喜歡愛撒嬌的我?
943Please respect copyright.PENANAexaVK6rPjQ
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新詩類
【NO.1】943Please respect copyright.PENANA88tP6ZhfIl
c.j.Vic943Please respect copyright.PENANAgtrZV4ioiY
#124 一池冬943Please respect copyright.PENANAfV4RuL4cnk
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANATcMSmiVtMn
以冬劃作池,是如此絢麗的譬喻。943Please respect copyright.PENANAd8cycoG9sl
943Please respect copyright.PENANA86LF5hCiY0
前三段,以池喻風雪泛起了一絲漣漪,卻怎麼樣也無法停止早已轉動的盪樣心頭。943Please respect copyright.PENANAkw1nBnOaQG
943Please respect copyright.PENANAhyOKFX4YZ9
而雪融之際,卻道盡了落幕情懷,而以那春有百花秋有月、夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛記心頭,那可如此令人感懷的好時節。只可惜,被攪動了一池中的深水,卻怎麼樣都無法平復了滿溢而出的傷痕;而大夢初醒誰又能先察覺出愛已不在?943Please respect copyright.PENANAj9fRYM68LX
943Please respect copyright.PENANAXeE73D3m7h
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此刻,春暖緣盡。一心只想著再與你心頭探戈,誦著一首名為回憶的圓舞曲。943Please respect copyright.PENANAuvktx21NVU
低頭,卻發覺,怎麼忘記了那步伐。943Please respect copyright.PENANAyikOFxB8oq
943Please respect copyright.PENANAY9QbWMupfI
【NO.2】943Please respect copyright.PENANAwjljivudzL
九方思想貓943Please respect copyright.PENANAm2NqStXDx9
#71 冬季幽禁943Please respect copyright.PENANAAvMUkTtDFh
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANA3OV7QKe4nf
或許,他將以禁錮了自己的情感作為戀愛的曲目。943Please respect copyright.PENANA8igtr9Ti7J
943Please respect copyright.PENANAgbupEPXDRJ
孤獨的苦痛泛起了這片幽恨漣漪,而他似乎迷失了過往自己生活過的歲月。943Please respect copyright.PENANAb41h57AJ0G
透過仍獨留在居室裡,她曾經使用過的物品,穿過的衣物,重複地撥放了兩人曾經誓言的跑馬燈。943Please respect copyright.PENANAvbvbMZR5Vg
此刻的他,打算將自己埋進了冬季的雪地裡不再走下去,而以此冬眠。943Please respect copyright.PENANA7F6Ve7CBfH
943Please respect copyright.PENANACuJUoN8fsU
943Please respect copyright.PENANAJIi6bPG7E3
「春季再叫我吧。」內心有道聲響悄悄地響起,可他卻已然不在意了。943Please respect copyright.PENANAOxzcYcecs3
943Please respect copyright.PENANA6XkEE5sVX8
靜瑟的金風,冷冽刺骨的要他品償 / 品嘗何為感情。943Please respect copyright.PENANA9bpTvWORcN
943Please respect copyright.PENANAcdsP9O17fB
【NO.3】943Please respect copyright.PENANAwiJLBiRrSW
虛冲943Please respect copyright.PENANA6znT5fNiuJ
#154 笑面943Please respect copyright.PENANAsSX1DyHwbJ
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAdUXxM4h9Rr
馬特峰的巍峨確實壯闊的令人為之讚嘆,猶如一高冷難近的美艷女子,即便座落於狹長的阿爾卑斯山一隅,世人也能輕易的尋覓中「她」來,正是獨特的皚皚白華飄著雪的盈盈地笑靨。943Please respect copyright.PENANADJMWUxZ8NN
943Please respect copyright.PENANABjC7xAoDh6
在那寒風刺骨的日子裏,深嘆口氣。943Please respect copyright.PENANAKnh0R6mhg2
豈料腦中揮之不去的都仍是妳的畫面。943Please respect copyright.PENANA8OJDJfmkC2
只是日日夜夜,歲月過去,走盡千萬里。943Please respect copyright.PENANABhJEOM4A39
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百忙之中,即便偶然一瞥妳過往相印片,才知道我倆已與過去的純真走的漸行漸遠。943Please respect copyright.PENANA7hvG6mVPoB
943Please respect copyright.PENANAIcTIEF33ce
再次回頭品嘗著沖虛的詩,此刻,我迷醉於這完美排列的字句組合與尾聲奇妙安排,竟可如此這般美的堪比句中那笑顏。943Please respect copyright.PENANAIIMycc3UNb
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「青春,總是留下著那明媚的憂傷。」943Please respect copyright.PENANAn3eBawerm0
943Please respect copyright.PENANAb8qvED3XGH
【NO.4】943Please respect copyright.PENANAH5KuxQTXmY
mi-na-mi943Please respect copyright.PENANAqDX3U2XqSU
#100 威靈頓的夏季943Please respect copyright.PENANAZIQxvwcFFV
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANAeE3kuueyhX
第一段詩句藉由回踏技巧,點燃了冬季惆悵的孤獨、夏季孤單的映襯。943Please respect copyright.PENANAWC8t62aip8
與妳相隔萬里的距離不是距離僅有內心,是你與我的依伴。最初的內分愛意---至今猶愛。943Please respect copyright.PENANAlQaC8wPOo8
943Please respect copyright.PENANASzV25pxBjR
尾段後勁的病痛將醞釀了多日連月來的孤寂全然爆發開來的思念藉由這日傍晚裊裊的一某夕印抹去在從威靈頓跨海千里外的太平洋西岸邊上。943Please respect copyright.PENANA9lUzDEPv3g
943Please respect copyright.PENANATkqr8vHTS7
【NO.5】943Please respect copyright.PENANAlaMluOkPAP
胤宸943Please respect copyright.PENANATOuIHF8XvI
【初評】943Please respect copyright.PENANA0p8fugpAFA
六出飛雪如精靈般飄逸著這片冬季的華麗,好似星光點綴美不勝收。943Please respect copyright.PENANA7ezQz3JTsF
943Please respect copyright.PENANAiaFZsTuaca
以景物寓情,用凋零枯葉來佈置出另一襯托的梅香肆意,卻為冬之饗宴,好比如沐浴在詩人自賞玩味的冷風中。943Please respect copyright.PENANAtLf6IfIXPu
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以七言絕句形式上表達出冬季的感覺,用描述景物的田園詩詞來呈現出冬季。943Please respect copyright.PENANAlTxIEl2f8v
上段「仄平平平仄平平、平平平平仄仄」以詩行句,魚魚不專業的建議,下句可為略改動「臘梅青竹矗飄飄。」而達到矗與舞同為動作上的呼應,翩翩起舞,與飄飄蕩蕩的青竹隨風搖曳的姿態,雙雙孤芳高雅,而以達成「仄平平平仄平平。」上下句的音韻上的對稱。943Please respect copyright.PENANAr5dtJ4HRGQ
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【佳作1】943Please respect copyright.PENANAXZdIvUIbcL
李宇霜943Please respect copyright.PENANAoFW6uRSmOj
#86 風厲霜芒943Please respect copyright.PENANAZtDd2yjCUb
943Please respect copyright.PENANAFgkNacYf4S
【佳作2】943Please respect copyright.PENANA0usXyj1GXf
翠玉943Please respect copyright.PENANAy96n31fNt8
943Please respect copyright.PENANAh1CIXs4jcZ
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「久等了,各位。」無法如期的完成總結,這裡先跟大家道個歉。
中途歷經了懷孕、生子、照顧新生兒等等的曲折,一切人生故事早已不言之中。
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第三期的排名,如上所示。
或許,有人會覺得評比有些偏差,由於這些全都是我一個人所整理與思慮,固然會有不盡人意之處,望多加體諒。
943Please respect copyright.PENANAP6CrMLcO8j
故事的結尾,你(妳)們還喜歡我的短評嗎?
如果不嫌棄,打賞我吧XDDD
943Please respect copyright.PENANAFsGTThP5Nl
另外,也希望每一期的創作挑戰都能再見到各位!!!
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