讀完了吞雲雀的《色彩戰爭》。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡHMftFPMMGU
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簡單講一下我的想法。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡCij2znegDH
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首先是世界觀，本作融合了色彩與遊戲這兩項元素，光是第一個要素就顯得十分特別了，加上後者則更顯得獨樹一格，感覺挺有巧思的。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡCjNOkObTDK
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而在色彩相關的敘述和設定上，也能感覺十分紮實，有一定的厚度，我挺喜歡這種感覺的。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡgpPyFMLaM7
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然後是角色。個人認為主要人物的描述顯得有些單薄，雖然能看見行文中加了表情、動作，但缺乏記憶點。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡvT7tlFK0Xh
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除了在設定上，可以構思某個角色的特別之處、反差，也能多講述一點角色的背景、想法，以便凸顯人物。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡgoVL2hIb8Y
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接著是行文。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡj7nib9IgUB
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本作的行文相當不錯，不過由於是第三人稱呈現，文字會顯得疏離。因此，可以多注意一下「主要視點」。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡlMNOpzMTLg
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設定某位角色（應該蠻多時候是安苒）作為中心，並且描述他內心的想法，並且觀察其他角色的行動，並推測他們各自的想法。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ1gnAMP2M3W
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如此一來，也會比較拉進角色跟讀者的距離。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ9i54LhyQhH
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另外，雲雀擅長描寫場景中的「物件」，我覺得很不錯，而相形之下，背景有時便顯得模糊，或許可以針對這點再多加描述。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡVhvI2vh8lO
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至於臺詞方面，感覺蠻活潑且充滿幽默的，這點我覺得挺好的。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡtmky6geaRi
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大概是這樣。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡDX27m9AzBe
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如果有興趣的話，歡迎各位朋友來讀讀看。364Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡpdp3dWGc1d
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